ext_24173 ([identity profile] miss-zedem.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] dominique012 2007-05-11 01:48 pm (UTC)

That was lovely, so sweet and well written. Great first attempt!!

Tiny niggle - in Britain, 'pissed' means drunk. You want 'pissed off' for angry. It's not important, but it's the kind of thing that makes British readers go 'huh?' for a second.

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